Anna - Revised Paragraph

I had the most difficult experience of my life on a trip to an amusement park. I thought that it was the longest experience I have ever had. On my graduation trip to the amusement park, I was very excited about all the rides. But I was anxious about the rides that were very scary or too exciting. Although I was scared of them, I still rode a ride called “The Swinging Pirate Ship”. I screamed as loud as I could. Except for the pirate ship I mostly rode the slower rides like the carousel. I really liked one ride that was kind of a roller coaster, but it was in a dark place so you couldn’t see anything including the track. It was exciting but not scary. The most scary and the exciting ride I rode was a boat you can that went very high and quickly rushed down and splashed a lot of water on you. At first, I didn’t want to get on the boat but my friend said that it was not so scary. When I got on it I regreted it and I screamed and shouted, but it was too late. It went up and I began to close my eyes. Suddenly it went down. When the boat went down, I felt that was the longest time I had ever been on a ride, and I was very wet and cold. It was the most difficult experience of my life, but I think that it will be a good experience in my memory.